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It has been over 200 years since mankind left its home-system, and joined a budding galactic civilization along with several other alien races.
The new Galactic Council sought to build a home where all would be welcome, where free-trade and commerce could blossom, where common ground could be cultivated on solid ground. That ground was Brujagh, the fourth planet in the Akkor system.
Now, it’s 2204, and deep in the centre of the largest city on Brujagh, the 31st police force struggles to alleviate growing cultural tensions with the largest mixed-race police force in the system.
Unfortunately, as in every city, crime and violence undermine the efforts of leaders to establish the prosperity and protection they seek to offer not only to this city but people across the galaxy.
(editing isn’t that hard, and your writing is pretty bad here, but everyone’s is bad. Nobody is a good writer, but you can get good at editing to fix the mistakes, and that’s how good writers pull it off.)
You need an editor for your writing, or to edit it yourself. Some help:
It has been over 200 years since mankind left its home-system, and joined a budding galactic civilization along with several other alien races.
The new Galactic Council sought to build a home where all would be welcome, where free-trade and commerce could blossom, where common ground could be cultivated on solid ground. That ground was Brujagh, the fourth planet in the Akkor system.
Now, it’s 2204, and deep in the centre of the largest city on Brujagh, the 31st police force struggles to alleviate growing cultural tensions with the largest mixed-race police force in the system.
Unfortunately, as in every city, crime and violence undermine the efforts of leaders to establish the prosperity and protection they seek to offer not only to this city but people across the galaxy.
(editing isn’t that hard, and your writing is pretty bad here, but everyone’s is bad. Nobody is a good writer, but you can get good at editing to fix the mistakes, and that’s how good writers pull it off.)